Assignment 4: Persuasive Paper Part 2: Solution and AdvantagesDue Week 7 and worth 200 pointsUsing feedback from your professor and classmates, revise Part 1 and develop the solution and identify the advantages of the solution. Note: The disadvantages or challenges with your answers will be in Part 3.Write a six to eight (6-8) page paper in which you:Provide Part I: Revision of A Problem Exists (3-4 pages)1. Revise, using feedback from the professor and classmates, your Persuasive Paper Part I: A Problem Exists. Develop Part 2: Solution to Problem and Advantages (3-4 pages for 6-8 pages total)2. Include a defensible, relevant thesis statement clearly in the first paragraph. (The thesis statement may need to be modified to reflect added information and purpose of this part.)3. Explain a detailed, viable solution that supports your thesis. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs.4. State, explain, and support the first advantage (economic, social, political, environmental, social, equitable, ethical/moral, etc.) to your solution. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs.5. State, explain, and support the second advantage (economic, social, political, environmental, social, equitable, ethical/moral, etc.) to your solution. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs.6. State, explain, and support the third (and fourth if desired) advantage (economic, social, political, environmental, social, equitable, ethical/moral, etc.) to your solution. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs.7. Use effective transitional words, phrases, and sentences.8. Provide a concluding paragraph / transitional paragraph that summarizes the proposed solution and its advantages.9. Develop a coherently structured paper with an introduction, body, and conclusion.10. Use one (1) or more rhetorical strategies (ethos, logos, pathos) to explain advantages. 11. Support advantage claims with at least three (3) additional quality relevant references. Use at least six (6) total for Parts 1 and 2. Note: Wikipedia and other Websites do not qualify as academic resources.Your assignment must follow these formatting guidelines:Be typed, double spaced, using Times New Roman font (size 12), with one-inch margins on all sides; citations and references must follow APA or school-specific format. Check with your professor for any additional instructions.Include a cover page containing the title of the assignment, the student’s name, the professor’s name, the course title, and the date. The cover page and the reference page are not included in the required assignment page length.
Strengths < Areas for Improvement 1 Provide an appropriate title and an interesting opening paragraph to appeal to your stated audience (appeal with logic, ethics, or emotion). Reader will identify the cause for concern, and understand the need to be armed in the work place. Introduction was a little generic. Perhaps you could provide a little more information or a little more detail. Ex. Why is security World Wide an issue? 2 Include a defensible, relevant thesis statement in the first paragraph. (With revised thesis statement.) Very clear thesis statement. The reader understands the direction of the paper and your standing on the matter. The reader should be able to determine your thesis statement by just reading it. Try removing “The Thesis States” 3 Describe the history and status of the issue and provide an overview of the problem(s) that need to be addressed. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs. You have effectively provided the reader with the history of the matter and the tragic outcomes in relation to allowing civilians to carry conceal weapons in other areas. There is no information in regards to the subject – the historical information does not reflect the work place. Perhaps there could be incidents or highlight of case that occurred in the work place pertaining to work place violence. 4 Explain the first problem (economic, social, political, environmental, complexity, inequity, ethical/moral, etc.) and provide support for your claims. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs. The first problem is stated to be a social issue. This allows the reader to see the issue and the impact it is having on society. Information is limited. Could elaborate a little more in order to provide more incite with the reader. 5 Explain the second problem (economic, social, political, environmental, complexity, inequity, ethical/moral, etc.). And provide support for your claims. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs. The second problem is clearly identified as an economic problem. Here we have very limited information and supporting facts or information to highlight the effect on the economy. What does this do for companies, consumers, stakeholders, competitors? These are just a few questions that perhaps could be answered. The use of words as well as grammar can confuse or lose the interest of the reader. Ex “The second problem identified is economic factor” try adding “an” before economic. 6 Explain the third problem (economic, social, political, environmental, complexity, inequity, ethical/moral, etc.) and provide support for your claims. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs. The third issue is clearly identified as an ethical issue which can affect the employers as well as the business. Could be a little more in depth and provide examples or cases of the outcome of the problem. Again the use of words as well as grammar can confuse or lose the interest of the reader. Ex. “If workplace lacks standards ethical”. By placing your words correctly you can improve your writing skills. Ex. “Workplaces that lacks ethical standards are…” 7 Use effective transitional words, phrases, and sentences throughout the paper. Very good use of words when presenting your paper. There aren’t many transitions in your paper. You are more answering questions pose by the rubric as oppose to using transition in your writing to bring out those points. Transitions signal relationships between ideas. This establishes logical connections between sentences, paragraphs, and sections of your papers and tells readers what to do with the information you present to them. 8 Provide a concluding paragraph that summarizes the stated problems and promises a solution. Your conclusion does summarize your thoughts, as well as demonstrates the importance of your ideas. It also propels your reader to a new view of conceal weapons in the workplace. Synthesize, don’t summarize: Include a brief summary of the paper’s main points, but don’t simply repeat things that were in your paper. Instead, show your reader how the points you made and the support and examples you used fit together. Pull it all together. 9 Develop a coherently structured paper with an introduction, body, and conclusion. You have successfully included ALL components of a paper. Very limited information and supporting facts used. Perhaps a little more detail would make the paper be more substantial. Remove the questions from the assignment rubric and use transition to guide your reader while effectively answering the rubric questions. 10 Support claims with at least three (3) quality, relevant references. Use credible, academic sources available through Strayer University’s Resource Center. Great use of sources and support claims. For citations in the text, list the last name of the author and the page number in parentheses. For example: Second-language learners develop more quickly when learning the L2 before puberty (Connor 113). If you reference two different books by the same author in your text, then you'll need to distinguish between the two books by including a condensed version of the title. For example: (Connor, Language 182). 11 Other Great presentation of the subject and fulfilling your writing objectives. Proofread. Check sentence structure, grammar, spelling, and such. These finishing touches will help polish your writing and make it more professional. Should citizens be permitted to carry a concealed weapon to their workplace? Timothy J. Carlton Professor Lisa Teitler Research and Writing July 28, 2014 Introduction The security all over the world has become a global issue in the workplace, institution, school and offices. The reason why citizens should be permitted to carry concealed weapons is because they ought to defend for themselves. Self-defense is important to any civilians even when not armed because there is possibility to mitigate those chances involving attacks. Since every citizen has freedom to life, the citizens are not supposed to carry weapons in their workplace (Franze, 1998). The reason why the citizens do not deserve carrying weapons to their workplace is because of the risk whereby citizens may become lawless and abusive to freedom. Certainly, it is also known that every freedom is accompanied by limits regarding lawlessness. Thesis statement Thesis states that, allowing citizens to carry the concealed weapons to their workplace poses potential risks to workplace violence. Certainly, when a right to carry a concealed handgun is proposed, there is fear and hysteria about blood in streets. Most of the opponents may suffer from fear of change, fear of unknown and also the fear of their citizens and neighbors. Considering this issue, the right self-defense through possession of weapons should retreat into fear for violent criminals (Lott, 2010). Civilians should not carry guns to their workplace because most of them are improperly trained or are undertrained persons hence carrying their loaded guns put people in risks of being killed or even injured unintentionally or even intentionally. It is also quite difficult for the law enforcement to identify who are the real perpetrators during the shooting. This thesis addresses that allowing people to carry concealed guns in workplace or in densely populated cities and even in crowded sub-highways is a recipe pose for a disaster. Describe the history and status of the issue and provide an overview of the problem(s) that need to be addressed. Moreover, people with the permit to own weapons are law-abiding and quite often they kill people in the road rage incidents, after a long argument in their socialization and perhaps domestic disputes. The problem involves presence of handgun escalation which might result to homicide. Most of people have died in the hands of concealed weapons law-abiding. Certainly, this may continue if the state legislators Act would not respond immediately to this issue and fix the laws (Lott, 2003). The law-abiding people who carry guns have contributed to a big increase in gun ownership. Also allowing citizens to have right to carry firearms for self-protection leads to negative consequences which has been claimed by the critics. The evidence to the problem illustrates that the concealed weapons law is dangerous and major threat to civilians. The act of carrying concealed handgun increase chances of confrontation escalating and it also turns to be lethal. Explain the first problem (economic, social, political, environmental, complexity, inequity, ethical/moral, etc.) and provide support for your claims. The first problem regarding the use of concealed weapons is that there is considerable attention in popular press as well as among safety and health professionals. The fatal and non-fatal violence in the workplace determines the actual prevention of gun possession. The problem has much issues regarding social in common. The way to which many states have passed concealed weapons laws, the workplace have to develop violence prevention policy in order to establish system for documenting and eliminating violent incidents in the workplace (Franze, 1998). When people are in the workplace, this is considered as a social challenge because the use of concealed weapons may threaten the lives of citizens. Therefore, the employees have to recognize potential problems of the workplace violence and their obligations so as to do what’s possible to prevent them. This means that, the long term efforts in reducing level of violence in US society addresses variety of the social issues like education and environmental justice. Explain the second problem (economic, social, political, environmental, complexity, inequity, ethical/moral, etc.) and provide support for your claims. The second problem identified is economic factor both in any form of business or workplace to which it sounds dangerous for the employers. The employers who allow customers on business premises have to provide a reasonable safe environment (Lott, 2003). There have to be legal and relations departments to assess threats of violence. Allowing people to be harmed in the workplace contributes to unsafe environment. Explain the third problem (economic, social, political, environmental, complexity, inequity, ethical/moral, etc.) and provide support for your claims. The third problem identified is ethical issues regarding the possession of concealed weapons in the workplace. If workplace lacks standards ethical, the employers are at risks of losing the valuable employees as well as customers (Lott, 2010). Allowing citizens to carry the concealed weapons to their workplace contributes to ethics effects whereby some common unethical behaviors in the workplace emerge. Rationale of carrying weapons to the workplace The actual satisfactory of the employee in the workplace is feeling safe and free from threats of any sort of physical violence. Carrying concealed handgun in public is allowed for non-law enforcement officials. In a clear concise, the opponents of concealed weapon carry argues that there is an increased gun ownership which attributed to more gun crimes and unintended gun injuries. There is threat to the society in regards to social perspectives whereby the society would not be safer by having much guns in the streets (Lott, 2010). Even though there are laws pertaining concealed weapons policy, the employees possesses them and are allowed by the law to possess weapons but these weapons are prohibited on any company property or location. In order to cut down the risk involved in gun violence in the workplaces, there are policies which ban anyone, employee or even visitors from carrying their concealed weapons in the business or company’s premises. Rationale for the laws is that most of Americans have right to bear arms in defending themselves. The rules prohibiting guns in workplace have been indentified to be upheld by most courts. However, wherever one of the rules makes concealed weapons it creates controversy because some people feel strongly on both sides of the issue. Most of the organizations have either formal or in informal weapons policies in their workplace. Majority of these organizations tends to investigate the actual background of their potential employees (Franze, 1998). Considering the prevalence of weapons policies in workplace, many of organization put in action the precautions so as to reduce risk of workplace violence by implementing policies which outlines their expectations of employee behavior. The workplace weapons policies extend beyond the confirmed violations and establish the procedures for handling suspected violations of weapons policy. The workplace weapon policies play a major role for reducing risk of evidence in workplace by setting behavioral expectation for established employees. Provide a concluding paragraph that summarizes the stated problems and promises a solution. The first problem regarding the use of concealed weapons is that there is considerable attention in popular press as well as among safety and health professionals. The second problem identified is economic factor both in any form of business or workplace to which it sounds dangerous for the employers (Franze, 1998). The third problem identified is ethical issues regarding the possession of concealed weapons in the workplace. The possible solution is to develop a workplace policy targeting mission statement and code of conduct. The other solution is to provide the workplace with ethics training to the employees. References Franze, L. M. (1998). Texas employment law. Costa Mesa, CA: James Pub. Lott, J. R. (2010). More Guns, Less Crime: Understanding Crime and Gun Control Laws. Chicago: University of Chicago Press. Lott, J. R. (2003). The bias against guns: Why almost everything you've heard about gun control is wrong. Washington, D.C: Regnery Pub.